All Comments on 'Anne Gets a New Job'

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RuthMRuthM19 days ago

Great story and the start of whoring for money and being pimped out by Margate

AnonymousAnonymous16 days ago

Story was good, but the writing lacked maturity. See if you can find an editor who can help you develop. Look up possessive apostrophes - most of yours were missing, which makes reading difficult. Short sentences, while better than too long ones, are to be used in moderation. I did enjoy ‘hand jesters’ though.

tonyptonyp14 days agoAuthor

I need a good editor

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I love erotic ideas - couples, threesomes, watching being watched.

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