by HarryHill
Very strong and imaginative description of this individual, Harry! I cannot but smile, and the last two lines are a killer.
5ed.
reminds me a little of John Crowe Ransom
not a bad thing to remind me of
5ed
this is full of character and movement, the final two lines just beautiful - the language changes with the crossover from the initial actions to the introspective thoughtfulness and longing
Exceptional poem, from the outset it's as if the interior monologue is rolling digression, more important things to do but impossible to concentrate,
reclamation, digression, ahem,
What can I say you rock sounds.
Final two lines magnificent.
5
I have absolutely no idea what this poem means or is saying. I suspect that I am not alone among the readers here.
Obviously not only Harry but several others have clear ideas on it and consider it extremely good.
This is as far as I can get:
• There is a bee or a wasp in the first verse (could be the sweaty man in the next verse) & something about a digression
• Second verse has a sunburnt and sweaty guy preening himself & using scissors (to trim?)
• Third verse has a different or the same guy walking around the house longing for something & having metaphorical binoculars.
Now there are poems that I understand (to at least some extent) and like, mostly clear but some (eg SusanSnow) with some degree of obscurity. Then there are others where I am pretty sure of what the writer is doing & I don’t rate the poem. Then there are poems where I do not understand them at all. This is one of the third kind. It is clear that both Harry and his admirers are intelligent and well read. So please, this is a genuine request and not some kind of back handed put down.
So. Please someone.
Three poems in one submission #117
the blue bee is a beanie baby sent to me as a gift and residing on my desk, the headband a scrunchy that held my braided hair on a long trip home
digression, fucking around instead of writing
the second is just a moment in time after coming in the house from working in the garden and putting my hair up in a bun to cool off. if I said, combed my hair with a pencil, would it make more sense? Just trying to describe the moment and playing with sounds rhythms
the third was a reply to another poem in writing live saying how much I missed my love
hope that helps
After your crystallizin' Xplana-shun to Clearday everything is fully appreciated ( Defendin' Champs Espania & Australia just got knocked outta' Brazinga'14 ) & i 5-ed
---- your bro A-9
I thought it was a rather odd lumber size. Here is a present (.), a period, use it sparingly.
Thank you very much for taking the time to explain that. It was extremely helpful.
I had somewhat stupidly thought that the 117*3 was the power of the binoculars. OK, I do not use binoculars.
I think that as with music, there are different styles or even approaches to poetry. All valid to those who appreciate them. I greatly appreciate that insight into your verse.