I used 'no more' instead of 'anymore' because I didn't want to use repetition, as I have used 'anymore'...
and the ending is perfect. You know you can resubmit a poem if you want to correct things in it. The...
this poem has some great lines, stream of consciousness, emotion and force, keep at it!
cheers for picking up the typo :-/ I guess skin can be taught.....
The word penetrates was supposed...
Perhaps a little too lengthy to hold attention of reader, if you go for length you need to have details...
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