Not a bad story. It's hard not to end up with a story "like all the others", but you did well. It seemed you were getting him a little fixated on Jean; he needs to push himself to see how wide-ranging his talents are. Don't get carried away so that you make the story unbelievable. Keep it simple and straightforward. Nice job so far, and I very much hope to see more in this series !!!
A great start to the story. I'm looking forward to the next chapter
My cock is pointing in the down direction however :(
Extremely well done. Thank you.
Man, this story started with a lot of potential but by chapter 3 you drove it into the ground.
Fuck me, I skipped from chapter 3 to chapter 7 just to see if it would be at all interesting to keep reading, I said that you had managed to ram the story into the ground by chapter 3 but by chapter 7 judging by the small snippets I did read you fucking nuked this story into oblivion, damn.
The first three chapters I really enjoyed but it seems to have hit a mid story hump. There is less of the device and no explanation as to why the effects aren't wearing off. Yes we are getting to see how all three are being corrupted but the context seems y have gone. We need to see what happens as one or both come out from the influence. Does he use the device to regain control? Does he abandon them for new prey. Is the dvice having a slower more insidious effect on his concept of right & wrong? There is plenty of scope but the story is in danger of turning into one where he simply fucks both again just because he has to which would be a shame
I hope you will keep this series going especially heading back to find out what is happening with Restrainer and Animes, I have enjoyed the plot and set up. Thank you for writing such fun characters.
Defo one of the best stories on the site. Needs a little longer with the couplings but other than that I cant complain at all. Next chapter please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I read hundreds of stories here every week. Over the past five years not one has shown half as much character development, excellent editing, good storytelling, or ingenuity. Great read, highly recommended.
This definitely has possibilities. BUT, where is Ch 2?
This is like reading a full on erotic novel. I can't wait to read more, this is phenomenal!
Read again and still as amazing as the first time. Really love this story, cant wait for chapter 2 to finally be releaced
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