... the ability to convey all the details in the written word. I really like this series and am glad I found it.
I agree with Tanacious, that in the first page or so, you obviously were in a hurry to put down your thoughts and made quite a few grammatical errors (we all do and normally you have excellent grammatical skills). When you have that great urge to express your thoughts, maybe it might help to hand write them and then you can methodically write the story with your normal skills.
Great story idea and great development! I will most likely stay up later than normal tonight just to finish the series.
I loved your story. I think she has a thing for her stepbrother or else why would she let him fuck her. She could have said stop the first time he touched her but she didn't.
A chapter 2 could be good but your story doesn't need it, it's great as it is.
You're off to a fantastic start. I am excited to see where you go with it and how far she will be pushed. I wouldn't mind a few glimpses of what she's thinking/feeling about her transformation.
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You have a vivid imagination and what is more important...
... the ability to convey all the details in the written word. I really like this series and am glad I found it.
I agree with Tanacious, that in the first page or so, you obviously were in a hurry to put down your thoughts and made quite a few grammatical errors (we all do and normally you have excellent grammatical skills). When you have that great urge to express your thoughts, maybe it might help to hand write them and then you can methodically write the story with your normal skills.
Great story idea and great development! I will most likely stay up later than normal tonight just to finish the series.
JR
Fucking amazing
I loved your story. I think she has a thing for her stepbrother or else why would she let him fuck her. She could have said stop the first time he touched her but she didn't.
A chapter 2 could be good but your story doesn't need it, it's great as it is.
good story
when is the next chapter coming?
Good story...
but I hope I dont have to wait another year for the next chapter!
great story... please add another chapter!
Really enjoyed the POV. Hope to see more.
Ch 02 on the way
Lit should get it published in about 4 days.
luv this series, never dull !! keep going!
Hurry
Great story. Please give us a chapter 2 quickly. He IS evil and I like it.
any idea when the next chapter will be published? i love this story!
Good start
Very nice story. I hope it continues.
Great Start
You're off to a fantastic start. I am excited to see where you go with it and how far she will be pushed. I wouldn't mind a few glimpses of what she's thinking/feeling about her transformation.
Nice
Totally agree with the others here... great job
Fucking Nailed It!!!
Can't wait for the Halloween party...
a good story
looking forward to the next installment.
Never dull!
Another great chapter. Steady and interesting development.