Fan of the story.... please keep it going!
Like most mind control stories this is nothing but a testament of how much many men fear strong women.
I rounded to 5 stars - this is definitely something we'll want to see a lot more of.
One small piece of advice though: don't make Brandon completely amoral.
In order for us to care about the character, we have to see him actually care about something other than revenge -- i.e. doing the "right thing," wanting to prevent (at least some) other people from being hurt, etc. If Brandon is nothing more than a douche with power, then we will never really get invested in his story and it will suffer greatly for it.
But there's plenty of time to develop him into an actual person, so keep up the good work and bring us a great follow-up soon!
This is one of the hottest stories I've read on here!
I know you've gotten some criticism for being too extreme, but please don't feel like you need to limit your imagination! I love your descriptions of the girls' fear/hate as he breaks them in. How would he react to claiming a tight teen girl only to discover she's gay and finds his cock repulsive?
Looking forward to reading more from you! Keep it up!
She is turning into quite the horny little slut. She is admitting to feeling the hots for Janice and Kim to willing getting on her knees to suck Johns cock and swallowing his heavy load. Cuckolding her boyfriend. Very well done, cannot wait for the next appointment.
I'm enjoying your story. I love you keeping it light. Keep it up! Maybe a relationship with Dr Klines? I don't know.
I am very glad to hear that this incredible story is not the end, and I look forward to Celestial Corruption with bated breath.
While I don't think this would make a good live action or cg enhanced movie- this would make an excellent movie in the anime style. I can't even express how much I hope that you can pursue that and find success!
You said that this was the final chapter but I really can't wait for more- more, I hope, that includes some well played fun with Alarial and Cariel and Devnik all together (that was a hint with the blood on his lips, right?).
It's very sexy indeed. I hope that you make more in this series. It practically makes you a part of the characters!
Maybe she is bi and just has not accepted it yet? Another good chapter. But so far pretty much a normal Dr visit. We will see how this progresses.
Damn, pills and more. But the good Dr must have got something to treat her for free. And I wonder how far our fair girl will go and change?
Why would you even consider making this a single story when it definitely lends itself to a series. I gave you a 5 only because that was as high as I could go. Now it's time for you to do your part and add several chapters to this wonderful story. The possibility of future stories is endless. Great job!
this series i great.PLZ keep it coming and with shorter gaps between chapters if you can. Thanks!!!
I didn't notice what category it was in, I was just happy to find a story of yours that I hadn't read yet. I'm sorry I found it. Mind control is rape; and in no way, subject matter for entertainment. While I could suspend belief to consider unwilling hypnosis; Russell's actions are completely unbelievable. I would have ignored the phone, and Marco would be in a hospital. The idea that something this radical wouldn't be completely spelled out in advance with signitures required to avoid death from a misunderstanding is as big a stretch as the original primise.
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