All Comments on 'Just a Chaotic Love Poem'

How can you write at a time like this? Best of luck. I wish you happiness.

See you when you get back.

When your head is on.

This is great:

The climb is steep and hard.

Seconds steal the minutes.

Pictures smile above the landing.

Fresh flowers in the den.

Fear.

The line stops IMO would have worked even better here if you hadn't done so much of the same in the other stanzas. With more enjambment in those stanzas, a better rhythm would have been achieved, and the end stops in the above stanza would have been a nice variation where I think the images and words are most powerful, although the last stanza is good too as is.

Nothing to add to GMT's comments.

But it's not too smart to put up two poems with similar titles next to each other. The first poem has 50% more views than the second, probably because readers either casually thought they had already read it or not liking the first maybe just skipped the second... or something else altogether!

in ways confusing and profound

you took me on a journey. for that it's a solid 5.

that last line - heartbreaking, beautiful, wonderful.

I think this needs pulling together more but you definitely get the feelings and sorrow over as is