All Comments on 'Need You'

You are making some great progress dude! The line, "Round and round goes my crippled mind" was especially nice. I would offer the suggestion that in the line "Tick tock goes the digital cock" you change it to clock. For me there is enough of a contrast with "tick, tock" coming from a digital clock. I would still feel the anguish, but it just seems to read better to me. Well, come on! Where's #3? :)

Wow - is that embarassing or what? I must have proofed it 10 times and each time missed it. It *was* supposed to read "clock". Guess my mind was elsewhere!

Thanks for the feedback!