All Comments on 'Beach Lust'

Well done. Let's hope you stay inspired to write.

I love beach sex. I love having itch inking about it, wanting it, and reading stories about it. This one was pretty well done. The Him/Her structure was interesting and you handled it pretty well and the sex was really hot.

But, and this is a little peeve of mine, you did something that a lot of writers here do - suntan lotion gets rubbed all over, then fingers are placed in mouths and people kiss and lick their way down a body. We all know that lotion does not taste good and doing that would break the mood, to say the least. LOL

I use coconut oil at the beach, myself, since it has a SPF and doesn't cause the aforementioned problem. That way my girl can suck my cock anytime she wants without suntan lotion in her mouth. :-) Consider working that detail into you bed sex stories.

Keep writing! This one was good, picky detail aside.