All Comments on 'CC Forum - Adventure Ch. 01'

Learn how to write the proper forms of varous words before using them. Like "teeshirt" should be done as "tee shirt, t-shirt," otherwise it makes the author look stupid.

I always love it when the people who comment on these stories complain about the author's spelling and grammar...and make several spelling and grammatical mistakes in their own critique. Priceless.

Yes, this story could have been edited a little better, but it's hardly the worst written story I've read on this site. My problem with this story is that it both began and ended too quickly. We know nothing about these two characters and their relationship to each other, so it was difficult to care what happened to them. And once the action began, it was over shortly thereafter.

Keep writing, and don't let the self-righteous anons discourage you.