All Comments on 'Cheating Hearts Ch. 00'

I have this feeling this might be really good, next chapter please

The story is adequately written, although short. I am hoping that the next chapter will be at least as well written and will flesh out the characters

While not perfectly written, this shows real promise. I'm looking forward to seeing how you do with this.

i knew this was written by a woman when she said him being so cold was a reason for cheating not that he was cold towards her because she cheated, anyway i enjoyed what little you had written.

you have the beginnings of a good story line. Develop the characters further and possibly include some more background information about the main characters. I'll look forward to the next installament.

...and this looks interesting. write fast the next chapter please.

I like where you're heading but your work would benefit from a good editor.

Can't wait to read more

The trouble the "Interracial Love" tag is that it fails to say whether the romance is between a black man & a white woman, or the other way round. This story seems to be of the latter

While this novella has got off to a good start, romance between a WM & a BW is not my thing, so I will be moving on to something else

Perhaps one day Literotica.com will segment this tag into "Interracial Romance BMWW" & "Interracial Romance WMBW", and possibly more, though it may have helped if the author had tagged it herself at the beginning

And while interracial stories about relationships between a WM & BW may not be the previous commenter's "thing", they are so mine! And quite hard to find here on Lit where it seems like the only definition of interracial relationships is between a BM & WW. So thanks for catering to my fantasy/fetish with this story. I'm really liking it thus far.

Only helpful criticism I would suggest would be getting an editor - I know it can be very hard at times for an author to edit themselves - as there were a few grammatical errors, but overall nothing major enough to sully what has the makings to be a very good story.

And they are off to the races. Love the suspense and drama so far.

Could be a good start but I couldn't tell because I was really put off by the really bad grammar. You are changing tenses upt to 2 tiimes in one sentence! Needs to be sorted to make the story readable.

from commenting on the stories she is fucking annoying....

@anon 09/10/11 don't like the comments do fucking read them.