All Comments on 'Decent into Darkness'

And your best effort to date. Good luck with the contest!

Something about the way you describe the rainy night, drew me in. you kept my attention and made me want to read more. Bravo, mr. man.

Please? ~Imp

Good solid read CD. Got down to business, kept my attention without having to look back on something.

Dug the heat between the women.

Takes a great deal of courage. I found this to be very absorbing, well paced and in places, very erotic :)

Good work Cd.

*HUSG*

The story was creative and well thought out. Disappointing that there were a few grammar issues that detracted from the otherwise well written story. Some word confusions ( such as weather written instead of whether, that instead of than, a instead of and) along with some run on sentences (commas only separate if you use and, or, but... otherwise, you need a semi-colon) hit me pretty square in the face.

No one is perfect, but those really jumped out of the story.

This was really well done! Well conceived, well written. I really enjoyed the image of the black package wrapped in the orange ribbon for some reason. Nicely packaged story, too, altogether. Good luck!

Imaginative. I love the mind control and her effort to fight it. And sex without touching is extremely erotic.

Highly erotic story leading the reader along then starting the circle over.

Very descriptive and hot. :)

This was intriguing from the get go...loved it!

~Honey

but a few questions remain such as, what happens to Holly's classes now, since vampires only go out at night. As anon mentioned, the typos and word confusion detracted from the story but I still enjoyed it. I don't know if the title includes an error or a play on words.

Vampires are near and dear to my cold heart.Bravo.

A.

creepy story. I liked the female vampire. A nice variation on an old theme.

Good luck.

Black Tulip

Great job of scene setting with some imaginative twists, such as a female vampire. A good Halloween read, CD.

Rumple

The authour did a fine job with both characters.

The tension was built up wonderfully.

Nice piece of work.

my comment, which was titled "dark and forboding" and was dated Oct. 9, did not include my name. I am sure I wrote it in.

More!! More!!

Yes, cheerful_deviant, yours is a marvelously erotic story, but the grammar errors/typos are quite distracting. Your talent is great, but I hope you will engage an editor if this work indicates the limit of your own grammar checker or proof-reading.

Particularly distracting was the title: "Decent into Darkness" should have been "Descent into Darkness". Look it up: two words with entirely different meanings.

Please keep righting! (homophone joke)

Sexy AND scary - nice one!! Garden variety Dracula-type vamps?

Such a brilliant piece.......

Please add a sequel!

this story deserves to be carried forward and it would be a crime not to

More Mistress....pleeaaassse!!

Amazing story. Would be nice to eventually have a sequel.