All Comments on 'Innocent Pawn Ch. 04'

Great stories should be longer--yours is excellent! Keep it coming :)

This was great, you need to add more to this story... Lots more...

I've enjoyed the series, don't stop now!

I love the voice of the author. there is a craft to the writing that is often lacking in erotica. i love the way that the backstory is woven into the story and not just shoved in a stilted introductory paragraph. more, more and i for one would love to see a scene with the jilted marie -- andi

Your series is the best I've read. It's like an overly sexy love story and I love it! I can't wait for the next chapter!

I finished this last chapter hoping there was still another chapter to read. I love it! I can't wait to read more!

The chapters are too short and the story ends too soon! I want more!

Very saucy! I'm almost as wet as poor, pink-cheeked Bella now!

Keep him... I mean, keep IT up, sweetie.

xx.Sadie

loved it....can't wait for the next instalment. you should publish the story .... guarantee it will do well!

I'd like to see a bit more foreplay, and interaction between the two main characters. It's hard to believe she's fallen for him, great sex notwithstanding, when all he does is fuck her and leave. I like the fact that this is turning out to be a love story- it would be rather brutual if it weren't.

Overall, it's certainly one of the best ones I've read, cause I hate stories where they describe the height and weight and cup size (usually enormous) of the girls.

Very sexy

this is a great story. every chapter leaves me wet and wanting more! i hope that this ends in a love story. please keep writing.

I can't believe how talented you are, I really hope you keep this story up!

This chapter was trully wonderful! More more!

this story is getting so great !

If Charlotte Bronte, or Jane Austin had been able to write about such things in their day, this would have been it!!!

You story line is fantastic, your characters well rounded, and yes, even the dungeon scene is a masterfully written neccesity of the story. Not to mention the fact that it's just H-O-T!!

If there's anyone fool enough to leave you with anything but a 100% rating, fear not, assume, correctly, that theirs is an intellect not worthy of your writing skills!

Too bad! I really enjoyed this one.

That was so HOT...

I agree - Hot! Definitely some of the best-quality erotica I've read! Keep it up!

I am a fan of romance but come to the site looking for a little something else. Your story is amazing, and anything that gets me wet just sitting in the living room reading it is a good story in my book. Cant wait to read more!

I read the first four chapters of this series within an hour and I came each time. On this last chapter I came twice! So doing the simple math I came 5 times with in an hour which is saying a lot since I had already cum 2 this afternoon during sex. All I can say is thank you. Its been a great story so far and I can't wait to read the next chapters. -Kiki

I'm really disappointed by how this story has developed. Why is his father of any concern to her? Why is that the FIRST thing on her mind after being tortured and raped? And when she demands a promise from him in return, she asks for pointless information instead of clothes. This seems so unrealistic.

That was hot. Well, he is super hot, so of course that was hot :)

She seems very naive and innocent, which means she is not one of these spunky, feisty heroines we read of in fics, but perhaps she will develop some strength of character along the way. I am a little surprised at how easily he is able to reduce her into a quivering mess, as if she has no will of her own at all (even taking the innocence, naivety etc. into account), but again, perhaps she will get some balls later on. The sex is very hot, and you describe it so well. The only thing I might wish for is that her reactions would be a little more realistic, as she seems to experience very little pain and a lot of pleasure, whereas he is very big, she is very little etc. I would imagine it would be more of a pleasure/ pain mixture for her.

The incest / almost incest angle is interesting, the fact that her possible "savior" is a man who almost raped her as a child. This puts a different spin on things.

LOVE the jealousy your male lead displays, and the dominance etc. of course :)

Oh, and the ass play is delicious.

Can't wait to read more!

evonna xx

I'm a big fan of your other story, Conquered, but I'm not liking this one as much. The King in the other story seemed to at least have some good in him. This guy is a creepy bastard!

Its all just seeming a little false despite loving your other stories .He's raping her painfully and yet we are supposed to believe shes coming all over the place .No fear ,no distress .hmmmm.

This story is so good. I am on the my third story of yours. Your writing is awesome and very engaging. Thank you for sharing

i hated the anal paddling it was plain pain and nothing else very brutal no lube too dry and rough .perhaps it would have bern better if there was some anal foreplay before that hurried anal also whats wrong with this weak dumb slut bella behaving that anal was nothing painful too her even though its her first anal and that too dry(no lube) and rough?why is your female character so weak and dumb