by SecretlifeofAL
It's hard to read a story with the protagonists having no interesting qualities whatsoever. Just call them succubi and be done with it. And please make then at least a bit interesting and explain how they became what they were. Chapter 1 makes no sense whatsoever.
Cars don't have autopilot... even if you use cruise control to maintain the speed, someone needs to steer.
After all, if no one is able to resist and death is the only option then what does it matter? Especially if death is his only option then why wait? A bullet through the head will do quite nicely. Or a rope. Or whatever.
If the only excitement you can generate is some horribly painful demise, then big deal. It is neither horrifying or erotic, it is simply boring.
Really? That's the first indicator of that I've seen in six chapters.
Hopefully, there will be more soon. Seemed like you were updating once a month.