by availableslave2u
Love the general story. You caught the sense of exploration and of trying things out for the first time wonderfully. Can't wait to see your next one or the continuation of this one.
Oh, you have to follow up for the week's events!!! Please?
Great job on your first story and I look forward to reading more!
What a wonderfully descriptive story! You set the scene so well. I could picture everything in my mind as if I were there. Well done!!! I hope that there is a part 2, or more...!!
You know how to convey this story. Can't wait to read more of your writing.
Except for some minor grammar/spelling problems I could have give this delightful tale a 5. It was that good.
Wonderfully realistic. Even non-practioners of BDSM activities canot fail to be delighted and stimulated by this story
I truly loved the well written and graphic detailed writing in this story...can hardly wait to read the next one...i wish i could be there to write one with you....if you would like to try an write one together i can give you my email ...let me know
Very well-written! Anyone who finds this story to be boring, does not understand the emotions a woman feels when submitting in real life for her first time. The desire to please and to be obedient, being challenged by the responses of her own body. The desire to be loved, challenged by the inner need to serve Him. The struggle of body against mind. It all gets easier with practice, but that first time is to be treasured by both Dom and sub.
Great job!