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For a first time at writing, you did really great, especially with such a hard topic!! I'd love to see what drawing you would have for this story of yours!!!

Keep 'em cumming.....

~Honey

Wow, my 1st comment.

patty

Patty,

I really liked the story, you handled a tough subject, with the always difficult first person. You used that tool very well to let us into your mind; which was very erotic.

Keep in mind that when using the first person, you don't know what the others are thinking or feeling - only your interpretation of their emotions and actions.

Please keep writing, posting and drawing.

Thanks,

QMN

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a beautiful climax,

i like the little sounds she makes,

and her words of pleading,

and his words of command,

nice, very nice,

and rise and fall of the climax

and the soft gentle tenderness after,

very real, very genuine,

you share heart and soul in your writing,

nice,

shadow,