All Comments on 'MSDS Material Safety Data Sheet Ch. 03'

Good job!

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good payback. but was it enough. somehow the arrogant jerk should know or suspect she had something to do with his arrest

Nice and short. Good job..

Mmmm. 750 words. I usually avoid those like the plague. Mot short enough to be succinct and not long enough to be interesting. I was not wrong. But seeing as you had managed 3 parts I bit. For a 2250 word story it ain't half bad.

that was a dirty place to stop this

Never be smug or rub failures or wins in another's face, it will come back to haunt you.

You have 3 very short chapters from different perspectives telling the story. Basically the second and third are simple scenes. It could have been presented as a single story. The first chapter was the only one that took on an bit of a unique and it made the rest flounder. By separating the story you lost sight of the story itself.

If John wanted to get rid of his wife why go through all the bother of the green dye? Also, In this one you changed the name of John to Ron.

Average story at best.

Too much in too short of prose - 3.4*

Best one in the series. I gave it a Good Read ⭐⭐⭐ rating.

Keep Writing

JH4Fun

There is a reason not to break up a story into chapters. People will often not re-read the earlier chapter(s) and so will have imperfect recollection of the rest of the story. Here the chapter is so short and contains so little that if there is anything to be gained by making it a separate chapter I haven't figured it out.

Not what i expected. Thought she was the one to say she had a dozen guys during their marriage.

Aaaw this story sucks and so must the FC's life if the men she knows are this stupid but then what does it say about her?

Don't think any half-way smart lawyer would let his client go any place but his office or the other parties office to "sign" final divorce papers. And "shutup" would be his first words of advice. Too many ugly possibilities.

She burned that cheating bastard a new one. Great unexpected ending.

Quickie finale!

I liked.

Firemen and Paramedics are the worst cheaters and players on the planet. Worse than doctors/nurses and real estate

The 'gotcha' moment was so out of left field as to be non sequitur