All Comments on 'My Best Friend: Jayden & Gabriel Ch. 02'

Your fire and passion are lost by so many grammatical gotchas.

I'm a professional editor. Here's my advice -- Before you submit another story, put it away for a few days, then read it outloud. That will help a lot!

I just wanted to say that I love that song (by Robin Thicke)and it fit in with the story really well!

Well... I just don't know what to say. Oh wait, i got it; I KNOW!!! I've already said I have an editor and, yes, I do have the edited copies to the stories. But I submitted the raw copies first, because i don't know, i wanted to. I have to figure out how to delete the unedited version first. && maybe if i stop getting death threats about butchering my stories i'll post them with the unediting versions.

loves you all, Jessie

Good so far!

I AM SO FUCKING TIRED OF PEOPLE LEAVING COMMENTS ABOUT THE GRAMMER. SHIT THIS IS A FREE STORY!!!!!!!!

Ok, so there are a few grammar issues. I don't think it takes away from the story. Any reasonable reader can figure out what you mean. I know these ppl think they are being helpful, but I'm sure you got the message. If I had to choose b/w a perfectly edited chapter and a new chapter, I'd take the update any day. Soooo PLEASE UPDATE!!! This is good stuff.

The story is good,that what matters! Editing /spwlling check is easily fixed.I'd rather read a good story with a few editing mistakes,than read a bad story greatly edited!

Your story is GOOD, so please continue to write it!I,for one , am looking forward the next installment!

Can we get an update puleeeze? The story is great.

All you need is a good editor, author. You can write.

a fucking CLIFF HANGER? are you serious. pleasepleasepleasepleaseplease PUHLEEEEAAASSEEEUHHH!! finish the story.

This chapter made me listen to the song while reading it.... it was hot.

What happened

If anyone is interested, I have edited this story and resubmitted it under the Username Sourire

Awww so cute

Bruh good story. Wish there was more