All Comments on 'My Demise Ch. 02'

Hey give Paul a break....cut the guy loose and let him find someone who loves him, wind up this farce of a marriage. I know it is fantasy, but geeze, at least give the husband a chance to dump his cheating wife.

It's time for the husband to become aware that he has been betrayed.

Pay no attention to the assholes who want you to write according to their narrow ideas! They be encouraging you or simply moving on. I think you are a good writer and I love the story!

Where is it?

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Here we again have lots of gratuitous sex, with "powerful orgasms," but no real feeling, no emotion. Why is Shelley even married? To have a sugar daddy? Obviously no love for hubby Paul, none whatsoever. Puts him down with Allison (he just can't get the job done). I'll repeat what I said for Ch. 01, she has too much time on her hands. If she had to work, it would be good for her -- it would keep her off the streets. So far, she can fuck around all day, any or all days, and she doesn't get caught. The true meaning of a fairytale marriage.