by qualitywheat
Here we again have lots of gratuitous sex, with "powerful orgasms," but no real feeling, no emotion. Why is Shelley even married? To have a sugar daddy? Obviously no love for hubby Paul, none whatsoever. Puts him down with Allison (he just can't get the job done). I'll repeat what I said for Ch. 01, she has too much time on her hands. If she had to work, it would be good for her -- it would keep her off the streets. So far, she can fuck around all day, any or all days, and she doesn't get caught. The true meaning of a fairytale marriage.
Pay no attention to the assholes who want you to write according to their narrow ideas! They be encouraging you or simply moving on. I think you are a good writer and I love the story!
It's time for the husband to become aware that he has been betrayed.
Hey give Paul a break....cut the guy loose and let him find someone who loves him, wind up this farce of a marriage. I know it is fantasy, but geeze, at least give the husband a chance to dump his cheating wife.