All Comments on 'My Little One'

...for a first story at all. I would suggest getting an editor to clean up the grammatical and punctuation errors and you should be good to go!

this is definitely something that sounds fun... and something that my dom should read so he can do to me... this is a great scene and very interesting... and very good for your first story... hope there are more to follow

Hey man that's good shit I can't wait for the next chapter to come out let me know and ill definately will read and pass it as well. J

Again I think it's great for a first story, some grammar problems but very minor compared to how well you've imparted the passion and D/s connection between the two characters. I like the Dom's point of view - the thoughts behind the mask. I also liked how the girl controlled herself during the cock sucking and then later was just a hungry cockslut.

This was a good story you should definitely keep writing.