All Comments on 'My Vampire Lover'

Very nice start hun. Maybe on your next one you could get a little more detailed on the physical aspect. More detail on the actual act? My author handle is mstwistedangel (aka Queen bitch formerly storm_song on aff)

If you want to write a vampire story at least make it believable just because you say he bites your neck in the end doesn't mean your writing about a vampire think darker

A vampire tale with little bite - or sex.

This needs to be darker in tone or more erotic with an explicit sex scene - or preferably both.

Vampire stories are very numerous on this site - so if you are going to write one you need to up the ante or your reader will reach for a crucifix!