All Comments on 'One Night Ch. 01'

While the writing itself was very good, the story line read like a cheap graphic novel. I don’t think it’s a bad thing that this story appears to have died a quick natural death.

I've "Cum" Across Your Story. Usually I Do Not Read

Non - Lesbian Themed Stories. But I Thought I Give

You A Reading. It Was Well Written & Sexciting.

Though You Kind Of Left It Open. Did Chief Get

Her Pregnant? Please Let Me Know. Evidently You

Are Not Accepting Comments Feed Back Directly.

PLEASE Get back To me

Kisses

Kathy

really...would be great if you'd finish this one!

Once I did get past my initial confusion, the story moved along so well. The description of the encounter was explained so well, unlike anything I've read here. As another post alluded, I hope you continue the storyline. I can't wait to see what happens! Thanks for a good read.

This could turn out to be a great story line.

I enjoyed the writing.

Noticed this is your first submission, and you've succeeded quite well. Great prolonged attention to foreplay and the eventual climax. I look forward to the next installment.