All Comments on 'Road Rage'

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BazzzBazzzalmost 17 years ago
Good Story but needs more organization

I really like the female charactor in this story. She's strong self assured and very sexy. What I think you ahve to work on is the way you shift gears within the story. I don't mind you going from making love to the Asian to pulling over some drunk guys but you should do it in a more clear cut and organized way. Other than that I hope to read more about this beautiful amazon.

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