by LitEroCat
A lot of sex in a short story. Two couples using old sayings to initiate group sex. Interesting comparisons to make into a sexy tale.
too quick to have much in the way of erotic tension, and confusing to follow. First it sounds like Roxy is his girlfriend, then later we can figure out that Sue is his girlfriend. And then suddenly, Sue is his wife.
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Decent ideas, but sorely in need of editing. 2*