All Comments on 'Sassie, My Teenage Bride'

Past/future/presnt tenses in the same sentence??? Come on ... editors are available. The basis for your story is good .... graphic enough for most strokers .... but the writing is horrible. I was torn between a 2 or 3 star .... gave it nothing because the 3 was too good, and the 2 too bad.

At least learn the basics of writing, and use spell and grammar check before you submit.

Proof your work prior to submission. Poor grammar and spelling in a story suggest the author does not care about the reader. Every mistake jars the picture the reader is imagining making it difficult for them to enjoy the story you have written regardless of its potential.

I used to live near Williams Center. You left out mentioning how flat and bleak the place can be, especially in winter. I think that's why women from that area like to fuck so much. It brightens their days.