All Comments on 'The Hotel'

Definitely a unique encounter int he hotel room. I love the emotions, the heightened senses and the fact that there was a third person in the room watching.

definitely has something...

This has a lot going for it - but please be more careful over your presentation and grammar: 'There was three of us ...' is quite wrong and you have a lot of orphaned passage fragments.

The story itself was very good and I would like to read more of your work; I suggest you try to find someone to help you with proof-reading and so on - if you can polish your presentation a little you can easily be worth five stars; for now, only four.

Well done - and please keep writing.