All Comments on 'The Ring Of Power: In Her Mind'

nicely done hope u make more

You said you would be writing More Mind Control stories. and / or The Dark Necklace?

yes please I want a part two.

The story was ok but the main character (Tom) didn't use the ring much. I feel the story could have had more unintended consequences from its use. Some characters got introduced that had no use or meaning in the story. Some events of the story didn't flow well with others. There was no need to erase Sarah and Mary's memories of their conversation about Marys feelings. Tom could have simply changed the memories to Sarah telling Mary to give Tom a chance.

He'll need it for part two...

I have to disagree with an earlier poster who stated that giving the ring of power back was a poor plot device. By doing so, the author can then allow another deserving person to utilize it. Or maybe a not so deserving person. He can also allow Tom to retrieve it. This opens up many great possibilities for other characters and to develop the present ones further.

Lastly, I really liked this story and hope the author continues it. Maybe along the lines he stated in his post-story note.

Bravo on all the parts of this one! Well done, thank you.