The Talons of a Dark Heart Ch. 11

Really good, but I felt like the ending didn't do it justice.

This is the first story on this site that has made me cry from the very first chapter to the last. Heart-wrenching...

I really loved the way this story was written and it was amazing how they found love but I fell that her dieing is like a punch to the gut for everyone. It feels so sad knowing that even though he has moved on and has his daughter, he will never hold her again. I like this story and I feel that in my heart she didn't die in the story but lives with him as queen.

I personally didn't like the ending, because after she went through traumatic events, depression, and emotional scaring she dies!! I knew she was going to die when she continually got sick. I love all the other stories but I wish she didn't have to die! I think it would've been more dramatic if umma died and then the two love birds could live happily together. Other than the predictable ending I enjoyed this story.

The whole series was sad as a whole, especially in Talyis's point of view. Imagine being so emotionally scarred as to be terrified of loving ones soulmate because you literally CAN'T be hurt anymore or else you would die merely of losing the will to live. Anyway, please make a sequel if you can, preferably in a happier setting.

I absolutely loved this story. I wa in tears at the end. Great work.

Absolutely Amazing story... please continue to write, you have a true gift.

I have read this more than 15 times.Ilove it but I always want to cry.Please for all of us who been through hell with our mates and are still together please write an alternate ending for Talyis and Novak.PLEASE!

It was beautiful. Even though the ending wasn't what I wanted, it was beautiful. I just wished there could have been a 'happily ever after.'

Please write an alternate ending.The kings behavior; although despicable was normal for that time.She was his slave...to do with as he wished.But how would she be able to rule as queen with all of her rapists working(residing?)in the castle with her?What king would make a queen of the woman he gave to his men to rape?

I'm really sorry to tell you this but either this girl in the story or you (if you really believe in what you wrote) should immediately been put in a hospital and be treated.

I mean what woman in her right mind would forgive these things!!!! Are you out of your mind?!!! Oh my God I'm really disgusted , really really disgusted.

Yes, I enjoy this category of stories to some extend yes I may consider a girl forgiving someone who has raped her under some conditions but HOLY CRAP!!! brutalizing , gang bang rape , humiliating, dragging someone behind you on the dirt, hurting someone physically and mentally not once not twice but repeatedly!! (Oh my god so disgusting was this story that I didn't even read most of those chapters!! I had to skip most of the other ways he tormented that poor girl!! and then Just say that I am sorry?!! Good God don't you understand that there has to be a limitation , a border line for everything in this world?!!! My God, as far as I read he didn't even care that the girl was bleeding!!!

This can not even be named as Stockholm syndrome !!! this is poor insanity!!

And all of these crimes only because her father has done something?!!! is it really an excuse?!! just because she used to be a haughty princess while she was a child!!! Oh my God you've got to be kidding me!!

Yes he can be remoseful for what he has done but such a person who has literally drowned himself in insanity could never be a sane person ever. He WILL CERTAINLY repeat and repeat his actions anytime that he loses his temper. Even if he apologizes he is not a sane person he should be treated and maybe only maybe there would be a little hope for him!!! which I certainly doubt.

I'm awfully sorry for myself that I had to waste my time on such rubbish. Such unrealistic story.GOOD GOD I can not even imagine such a situation in fiction. The only reason I followed this story was to see what revenge she will be issuing on him?!!! just to find out that he says I'm sorry and then everything is okay!!! and then they marry!!!

I don't even care that she died or not died at the end because I think this is really a moot point!! with such a beginning it doesn't matter how you end the story.

You know you really were successful in ruining my day!

This story has the most depth of emotion out of all the ones I've read on this site. All revenge-type stories should be this good. It reminds me a little of Wuthering Heights.

This story was absolutely magnificent!!! I truly felt the feelings of the characters through out the entire story and cried, reading this final chapter. I hope that you continue writing, as you have a great talent in your storytelling. Thank you for this story!! :)

completely brilliant.

Maybe make one about the daughter and how she finds someone to love too.