All Comments on 'The Turning of Emily Ch. 01'

please let Monica be emily's Mistress, that would be so hot.. thanku xxx

I loved the story. I also think Monica should become her Mistressand turn her into a hardcore pain doll.!!!!

Fantastic story - looking forward to Emily's encounter with Monica.

I love the build up of apprehension and need. Excellent! I'm very much looking forward to the next chapter.

This is not bondage. Emily was betrayed. Emily loved Mickey enough that she put her life in the hands of a worthless man. Evidentally he did not want to do anything except beat her, so he had Angie,the Carpet Muncher, do his work for him. Emily made the right choice in breaking all ties with Mickey and the Carpet Muncher. Emily should take some time off and not have anything to do with Monica or a man. Althought the story was well written, we think the author should not give up his/her daytime job.

Laura & Lisa, bi sisters @ CU

great story,good feel for the victim's thought process etc.,but several times your sentence structure or punctuation was lacking and it detracts from an otherwise exciting read. This may be a case of the kettle calling the pot...cuz i don't always use an editor.