All Comments on 'Well Deserved'

Damn....loved this!

Damn, I had thought I'd changed that before I posted this. Oh well. I tend to be a bit iffy on when to use semicolons, so I just avoid them because I feel like misusing them would be more obnoxious than not using them. Next time!

and obviously written by an adult. Few spelling/typo errors, "tired" where you probably meant "tried", generally good grammar and competent punctuation, although you seem to favor sentence structures that call for semi-colons rather than commas. I enjoyed your characters and would like to see them developed further. Overall, an excellent initial effort and I'm looking forward to more.

Very good first effort with this story. I'm laughing now because I will sound like some of these other commentators on these stories when I say "it should be in another category, something like Sci-Fi and Fantasy". Well, not really but finding a good woman like this is certainly a fantasy these days.

4 stars.

... and as a first effort, very good too. I really enjoyed it, although it could have done with being a little longer and taking more time to develop.

4 *s, thanks and please write more for us!

This is my first bit of smut I've ever written, it was fun and I look forward to writing more!