All Comments on 'Hard Day's Night'

You wrote the sex scene pretty well, but you might work more on your set-up, description of your main characters and surroundings. It's nice to have a little build-up of tension between the characters before we get down to the dirty stuff!

My first time was with a friend of my brothers mom, who had a daughter in my grade and a son two years behind me. SHe was a SOuthern woman and taught me a lot in our few times together

This was an excellent erotic story until the tube-tying which ruined it.

I hope he fucked her again and again and again. She is hot for a mans cock and he has some to give her. A good pussy eater too.