from your first chapter. I will have to give you props for that. Perhaps make it a bit longer next time? A suggestion--try to maybe write a little background about this guy (wolf). Is he part of a pack? Maybe the alpha? Or is he a rogue. Just write something, so we know more about who this guy really is.
You have done a better job from the first one. Congrats. Before, half the time, you were skipping around. Now, I can tell exactly whats going on. Next goal. Try to make it longer and maybe go into even more details--with feelings/emotions/thoughts/past-history...etc. Also I would like to know more about the wolf. Who is he?
I look forward to reading your next chapter.
This story is starting to grow on me. I'm going to chapter 3-4 right now.
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