Wonderful story, very enjoyable. Well written, very thoughtful and as an older man myself, truthful. Up till I was 25 I didn't have much of a clue about how to REALLY please a woman.
Thank you 5*
Excellent! This second chapter was very erotic. I loved the afternoon fun. Jodi is a wonderful character. I do love these two but I wonder how and if you bring Mia into it. I wonder how TJ would feel. He seems very genuine and true to ‘one woman at a time’ type of man.
A lot packed into this chapter. I'm not sure what outcome I would like more, them having the close call with the slum youths or what would have happened if they had caught up with her. Too bad Toby will never have a chance with her. I'm sure it would have been an exciting time for both of them. Considering some of her other adventures, letting his mother watch doesn't seem that outrageous and would have been an encounter I would have liked to hear about.
I couldn't finish the first Page. Something about "in all his naked his glory" (or something like that), & then "I couldn't take my off him". I wouldn't submit something with BOTH of those mistakes to a site at all, let alone a contest!!!
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Nice!
Very hot!
Very nice!
Hot! I can’t wait to read the rest of your stories. I love the stockings and garter belt.
Very nice! I love when my wife surprises me with sexy lingerie. Stockings are my weakness.
Great story!!!!!!!!!
You need to write a new chapter. And add verbal speeches/sounds. Don’t just say she screamed - quote her screaming. Great story. Well done.
All of your stories are very hot but this series outstanding.
Wonderful story, very enjoyable. Well written, very thoughtful and as an older man myself, truthful. Up till I was 25 I didn't have much of a clue about how to REALLY please a woman.
Thank you 5*
Excellent! This second chapter was very erotic. I loved the afternoon fun. Jodi is a wonderful character. I do love these two but I wonder how and if you bring Mia into it. I wonder how TJ would feel. He seems very genuine and true to ‘one woman at a time’ type of man.
Regardless 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟
A lot packed into this chapter. I'm not sure what outcome I would like more, them having the close call with the slum youths or what would have happened if they had caught up with her. Too bad Toby will never have a chance with her. I'm sure it would have been an exciting time for both of them. Considering some of her other adventures, letting his mother watch doesn't seem that outrageous and would have been an encounter I would have liked to hear about.
I have something in my eye making it become watery ... must be a reaction to some dust!
NOT bad... outside of the reference to "packing behind his fly" but not "looking up to HIS face"!
I stopped there.
Lowest-possible score, due to countless mistakes on the first Page, before I could finish the conversation!
I couldn't finish the first Page. Something about "in all his naked his glory" (or something like that), & then "I couldn't take my off him". I wouldn't submit something with BOTH of those mistakes to a site at all, let alone a contest!!!