Love it, but please don't go for any harem or incest route in this story. It just wouldn't fit at all, but since I saw a few flags pop up for that possibility, even though I find it unlikely you'd go there, I had to say something :)
I hope they'll just tell his family about their relationship instead of them 'finding it out on their own' by either walking in on them like Marina or catching looks between them and figuring it out. It would be awesome to just have them all around the table and seeing Marina's disappointed face she wasn't able to do more and just the shock on his mother and sisters faces.
MORE FOR AND ABOUT SAM & ALEX, CASSIE & CHLOE
So good to have you back, one of the best authors on the site, please don't leave it as long this time. Seeing Pamela defeated by an even hotter woman was amazing.
A pleasant story.
I suggest that you consider removing that first paragraph. It really does nothing to advance the story or capture interest. The second paragraph (Jason enters the party) is where the story really begins, and it would make a strong opening.
THAT YOU WRITE THESE CRAPPERS NOT HAVING ANY KNOWLEDGE OF RELATIONSHIPS BETWEEN MEN AND WOMEN. YOUR STORY IS A TOTAL FAIRY TALE WITH NOTHING GOOD OR INTERESTING IN IT TO MAKE READERS WANT TO READ IT. TOTAL DISRESPECT AND HATRED BEYOND IMAGINATION.
AND PULL THIS SITE DEEPER INTO THE SLIME OF GROSS AND DISGUSTING STORIES. FUCKING ANYONE AND EVERYONE IS THE ONLY STORY LINE YOU FUCKERS SEEM TO WRITE ABOUT. JUST SLITHER AWAY AND NEVER WRITE AGAIN.
AND TELL YOU WHAT A FUCKING MORON YOU ARE. THIS WAS A STINKY PILE OF SHIT STORY. QUIT POSTING AND GO BACK TO JACKING OFF AND READING STORIES ON HERE.
More lousy drivel from a disturbed person.
Very sensual but not slutty. Classy and entertaining. Love it! Hope you do more!
No real justification as to how sex came about, which made everything after irrelevant and even ignoring that,very anti climatic .
but the skank cheryl is a cheating slut and need to be thrown to the curb...
A nice piece, though as is often the case it would be nice to see a more complete ending/epilogue, as I've notice with some of the author's other stories they end a bit abruptly.
Many stories like this are written in the now, so to speak, for me to find it fully satisfying narratively, I need to read what comes after, how will they manage going public about their feelings, (or for instance, as seen in incest stories, or other cases where the pairing is inappropriate, how will they keep it hidden and still have a happily ever after),
how will other people react to it? Such as Joe's daughter, will they get married? Will she get pregnant since they didn't use protection, and how would Joe feel about becoming a father again?
It is only after such things are tied up, or at least remarked upon that a story feels complete to me.
Very intense! I started reading thinking there's no way I'd get into this
WRONG!!! I spent days in a state of arousal that was just as delicious as the release. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Just sugar, no spice.
and then to be cut down by a taxi. TK U MLJ LV NV
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