Next chapter please lol
....if there isn't more to enjoy?
As I started, I thought it a fairly routine opening to a more typical MC-genre story. When it took a sudden left turn with the Latina stopping and entering the building, and immediately drawing our protagonist into the Twighlight Zone, my interest spiked.
At this point, I would like to hope there are more chapters coming.....as it would be very disappointing indeed, to have this short illustration be the sum of it.
Thank you for having an idea novel enough to capture both my attention and my imagination!
What did he do with the other ring he acquired? Could he not use that on another finger? Wasn't sure if you cleared that up or not. why bother going after the others if he isn't going to use them? Would have liked a little more content in this one but hopefully it will pick up.
Awesome story! Can't wait to read what happens next!
This story is amazing I read all 4 parts today and i cant wait for the fifth. This is literally a good story by itself not to mention the sex
Very good stories. Can't wait for the next one.
Really hot...I love the idea of my mind being messed with like that.
I loved this story.
So stupid... she could sue them for millions!
The tattoos would be removed, the ass and breasts could be reduced...
Revenge against her employers and the train company will make the movie Hostel look like an episode of Blue's Clues...
Wow, some people take things so seriously here. On social media everyone's such a critic!! Most people know they come here to read some erotica and most of it is lame and predictable. Maybe they're looking for a quick wank or something. Those no longer interest me. You, mondotoken, have come up with something creative and unique... A plot where dexter is a victim in more ways than one and he is his own worst enemy, wrestling with what he's becoming and what's happening to him. I don't know what you mean by how other people's comments have already changed your story. But don't let them get you down. It's your story and we're along for the ride. I also know you're not finished with it yet. I personally look forward to seeing where you are going to take this. Keep up the good work.
What's stopping her from suing?
Also what's stopping her from using the chair on Gail and the other employees on the train and even her own company?
Also she could always just mutilate and cripple them...
hope the next chapter/s arrive soon
What's that saying? Good things come to those who wait?
I've submitted part four a minute ago and it will be online as soon as the powers that be give it the all clear. Part five is written and with the editor and I'll do a first draft of part six this weekend. So chillax guys... it's coming!
Fantastic work! You're my favorite new author in a long, long time! Please keep writing more!
...stands for me too. Pdf, word, text whatever. It takes too damn long!
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