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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
No absence of cliches, too much "lightning", and it runs too long

but it is a heartfelt emotion expression. Outside is one word, "White lightning" is home brewed hooch (alcohol)--try not to repeat the same word unless needed to express a point; keep at it and you too will be a great poet.

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