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by RagdenZar

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AnonymousAnonymous2 months ago

Way too wordy, it took two paragraphs to get halfway down the hall to her hotel room. I lost interest before she even came to the door. Take out about half the words, or two thirds. Just my opinion.

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I've been writing short stories since elementary school. Most were sci-fi horror stories until someone recommended I try writing something on the lighter side. Wrote a few erotic stories. Thought I might share...

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