by Everettcb
This "story" should actually have been two separate attempts. The first could have been a great satire concerning the alleged womanizing presidential candidate (we all know who) and a glory-hound female newscaster who will do anything to get a scoop. The second, then, would be an essay on the upcoming presidential primaries and your opinions on each potential candidate. Combining the two into what appeared here was misguided and heavy-handed--I came into what I thought would be an interesting story and ended up with a subjective rant that went nowhere. Not fair.
perhaps this should have been in "reviews and essays".
Give your characters names, "female News journalist" over and over gets kinda old and cumbersome as does "Presidential hopeful candidate". Also, your story doesn't flow. It reads more like a series of bullet points than a story.