All Comments on 'A Crazy, Crazy Birthday Ch. 03'

It was a bit weird having an American setting described in, and populated by people using, distinctly Brittish English. Although a bit long, it was a good story line, and we'll written with only a few slips; superior to most of the stuff published here. By the way, there is no such thing as "labia lips."

Fair point - I guess it's too easy to fall back into our local dialects when concentrating on the story lines which in this case, because of the background, just had to be set in America! Need to try harder!

And also accept the 'length' issue - other people have made the same point and I was a bit surprised myself that chapter 1 came out at 8 Literotica pages! Trouble is that when you break a story into multiple parts, each one has to be readable in it's own right and it ends up getting a bit disjointed or full of repetition. More 'need to try harder'!!

Thanks for the positive feedback though!

Duke