All Comments on 'A Different Type of Dancing'

A very nice first effort. You've told the heroine's experience in a sensitive, sensual way. I especially liked the slow development of their relationship. It was realistic and believable.

One thing you might want to work on is to make your scenes more vivid to your reader. The sensuality in your intimate scenes came through well, but some of the descriptions were kind of blase: "The music was catchy, with great lyrics to complement it." I might say the same about the fellow. I can't really tell if there is any real passion between the two of them. How would she like their relationship to go from here?

Nice style. Want to read more.