All Comments on 'A Dusty Manuscript Ch. 07'

I have enjoyed the story... but while certain elements this time around were not as arousing as prior ones. I was disappointed in the lack of details. Details allow us to visualize the story. A key to good writing is to show us, dont tell us. For instance, I cant remember once what anyone was wearing in this chapter. They were fully clothes... and now they are suddenly naked. No details no visuals. Although I really like your concept. You seem to have less and less details and descriptions as each chapter moves forward. Less individual personalities from the characters as well. Just some food for thought.

I always appreciate constructive criticism- thanks!

Hey mate absolutely love this yarn mind control is one of my favorite categories. You are doing an excellent job with this one just thought you needed to know what a great job your doing and keep up the good work.

I love this story line. There are so many possibilities. Please keep it going. With a former FBI agent under his control he could find more potentially helpful and powerful things or people. I cant wait for the next part.

Thanks furburger69. I've been having fun writing this series

The tension is awesome and I love the new characters but there is a ton of them. Maybe some kind of key to keep track?

Badofbone... good point. I have a simple one for myself. I'll see about uploading it. :-)

This is a very exciting series!

Thank You for writing it. I hope it continues in the future.