All Comments on 'A Fantasy Come True'

Welcome as a new writer. A nice, but very brief story, To be "constructive" I recommend against using the 'Group Sex' section for a threesome story. Very few readers. Works better in Erotic Couplings" I think. Also, in future stories I recommend you invest more in character building. Who is 'friend'. A high school BF of hers, a neighbor, her hubby's boss from work, their mail-man, or maybe some stranger he picked up at Woolworths. Build more detail so we can give a damn about these people. Keep 'em coming.

It's obvious English is not your first language. Get an editor.

That moment what a nice woman finds out her husband thinks she's nothing but a filthy whore. Then a Martian Slut Ray hits her and she fails to respond as she should and get out of there and hire a lawyer. Nonsense.