All Comments on 'A Gift Massage Coupon'

Please get an editor, and some English lessons, before continuing. The story is very good, but the numerous punctuation and grammar errors made it difficult to read.

Seeing that English is not your first language this is a very good effort. As the previous comment said, if you can find a good editor it should help you a lot.

loved your story. beautifully told. don't worry about the grammar and punctuation. ask Literotica for help. they can suggest an editor to guide you. great story

Tell Jeff to stay plain

Its a great story and beautifully told

Thank you

I'm an American living in Germany, so maybe the punctuation and grammar just makes sense to me, but I had no issues with the writing style. I didn't even get mid-way through the first page before cumming (and I need to start my day), so I'm favoriting and saving this one for frequent rereads.

As someone who thought they were straight for the longest time, this really hit the spot for me.

Fabulous story, I love the German English.

Ps I am a jealous old man, with moderate success in oral skills. Not all women can relax xx

Wonderful first effort ,Don't worry about satisfying people who complain about punctuation. A story on here must stimulate mind and body & yours certainly did it for me . Not a squirter myself but you certainly made my inner walls so finger and taste friendly.

This needs continuation.

proof!

"I lied on my back ..."

First you lied on your stomach, then you lied on your back ... what position do you need to tell the truth?

Lovely story,

hanna_a

Hello Hanna. Thank you for your comment. Please read again the story :)

Thank you everyone for the remarks! I know, english is not my native language, but I was so excited to write my experiences :)

Five stars! What a wonder first story! Your English is darling, and reminded me of a beautiful girl from Hamburg I spent a summer with. More important than any small mistakes is how much better you write than most English natives on this site. I love how much this story inhabits the narrator’s body. And your descriptions of how her body is reacting are wonderfully creative. Please keep writing.

Wow, I love your delightful story. You write from your soul, and your account stays completely in the moment, and completely with you. I look forward to reading your private visit to the lovely masseuse.

This was really good. Highly erotic without advocating for some cause. After all, it is Literotica not Sermonizerotica.

Absolutely fantastic!! Thank you so much for sharing. Please write more of your adventures!