All Comments on 'A Much Needed Vacation From Reality'

Great story; moved it for its truthfulness, how hot it was and at the same time its innocence. The same story could be told in a much more raunchy way, but this straightforward "girl from nextdoor" style makes it credible.

Loved it, I really did.

that was meant to say "loved it for its truthfulness".... Typing with one hand.....sorry

Thanks, I appreciate it. I thought the 'raunchy' comment was interesting. I think raunchy can be great but 9 times out of 10 becomes ridiculous for me. I prefer to read a more general description and let my own mind fill in the details but I do have a goal to write an extremely raunchy story that doesn't seem dumb by the end. easier said than done but it's nice to have goals.

Good fantasy story - my fantasy! LOL!

I struggle in my own writing on what you're calling "raunchy" - I think it's question of how much detail to get into regarding the sex. I go into a little more detail than you do - I guess you could say more "raunchy" - but less so than many authors on this site. The thing is, getting really detailed about the sex, when done well, can be a real turn on - but it's SO hard to do well. And there are a lot of writers on this site who ... don't do it well.

In any event, I thought this story was very well done.

I couldn't agree more. Thanks for the input.

How do you feel about camping?

Meaning?

More details please so there's more build up

You're right! It needs a little build up.