by ao1701e
Are you offering free lobotomies with this bullshit? Because that’s what it’s going to take to enjoy this shit. It stinks worse than a pig barn in 100F
This has been a great series going. Look forward to your next story or series. Keep up the great writing!
Very poor ending to a great series. It seems that you forgot about Ezzie. I suggest that you write an Epilogue to tye up all the loose ends.
This has been an incredible series, so loving but hot and sexy at the same time. Thank you, I look forward to your next project.
The difference in this writing style is making the story difficult to read ... Most often the easier style is telling a story ... example ... "I see Karen light up and smile. "Ugh, they are in love." Says Joe. (SHOWING Style as in this story ... Rather than TELLING a story ... I SAW Karen light up and SMILED. "Ugh, they are in love," Joe SAID.
The story itself is not bad.
Very fun series to read! I appreciate how you grew as an author through the series as well. I look forward to reading the next generation!