All Comments on 'A Single Summer Ch. 01'

The jumping back and forth between narrating and 3rd person at the start really pulled me out of the story.

On a side note I don't care for cheating story lines either, but that's just me.

9 inch cock... Dude do some research, before posting bullshit... Dont quit your day job, if you are going to write garbage..

Good start. Don't rush the action

How would she know his daughter's name?

Great story look forward to part 2

Good start. Love to read more about these characters!

REALLY needs to be completed!!!

As per previous comments . . . agreement with some.

During the first portion you might have used he/his and her/hers rather than repetitiously inserting the assigned names.

The addition of punctuation woukd be an asset to your tale.

Despite these somewhat trivial shortcomings, I quite liked your submission.

Great start. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Sloppy. Mind for mounds?