All Comments on 'A Slave's Tale Ch. 03'

by Steveweis2001

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ShadowRosieShadowRosieabout 4 years ago

The story has a good start but you need to get a little more into the feelings of both people and the place they are in. Expand the idea of what is going on, have them talk about the future, goals, and interests. Give the slave more involvement, things he has to do on his own.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago
Good to have this story back!

I’ve enjoyed previous installments. Glad you’re back at it!

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