by JosephGibbs
I apologize for the name mishap. I had not noticed it while i was editing it and didnt catch it until someone told me about it. T_T i will try to correct this and make sure that it doesnt happen in the sequel. ^_^ thank you all for your feedback
The beginning was very confusing. First, Shiro is waiting for Laura, and then, all of a sudden Laura is there having a conversation with Draco. And THEN, all of a sudden a man that was sent by LAURA shows up to pick up Shiro. Isn't Laura already there? CONFUSING INDEED!
A twist for sure,and somewhat confusing at the start as i think you got the names mixed up,,,need an editor for sure,,,a good first try,,,practice makes perfect,good luck
Fairly good story but you got your pepole mix up there a time or two get a editer to look at your work keep up the story