All Comments on 'A Weekend Away continued'

I love this.It reminds me of when my voyeur husband tied me to a hotel bed,with my legs wide apart.All I had on was a pair of black stockings and suspenders,and he invited 2 elderly barmen up to the room.For the next 3 hours he watched them use my body in any way they wanted.I was fucked,spanked,sucked their cocks and taken up the arse.It was a very erotic night and I absolutely loved it, Caroline P

Very nice follow up. This is my dream for my wife exactly.

Really enjoyed these two chapters, having read both today.

If your pen name means anything, I take it you are British, confirmed by knickers and arse. You then go on to write of panties and asses - don't be ashamed of who you are please, just stick to UK English, including spelling.

Look forward to reading more from you.

After the first story I was afraid it becomes a cukcold-story with Chris as the bull. But now it seems it becomes a swinging story. I hope that the MC fucks Emma if Chris is fucking Lana.

Not a bad story. You do need an editor, or read more books and notice how they are structured.

You should use caps or not, never use a combination, so LaNAAAAAAAAAA should be LANA, or to tease it out, as looks to be the intent, LAAANNNAAA! With an exclamation mark if it’s the end of the dialogue.

Also you need to use fall stops after people finish talking. You also need to add commas to signify someone is talking:

Like this: Emma started to moan, “Lick my pussy Lana. Lick it, eat me Lana, Lick it, make me cum LAAANNNAAA!"

So dialogue is always, either comma (,) “dialogue.” Or , “dialogue.”

Hope that helps.

I will try to take that into account and spend some time if I do more.

Fantastic story!!!

Wonderful continuation.