All Comments on 'After School Delight Pt. 11'

I keep reading this story thinking that Jenny will be found out for the evil person that she is and put away. Macey seems to understand what's going on but never seems to want to do anything about it. This last chapter she was just as bad as they were, when she took advantage of Hana and raped her while her girlfriend was being raped in the other room. It's your story but it would be nice if there was at least one redeeming character that would try to do something, they are raping underage girls and using mind control on all of them.

They get their come-uppance in the last part (or do they? ;)

Does not look like this story is ever going to be finished.

Well I flipped through your story admiring your writing talent, however not the plot… I mentioned before: a total imbalance between the over lengthy sex scenes and actual story… there is no conclusion…just more of the same…I liked your character Macey, but she does not evolve, is continued hypnotised and ill treated…no fun to read that