All Comments on 'Afternoon at the Spa'

As a certified massage therapist, I've had many clients who wanted more than a standard session. Most of the women indicated their desires a bit more subtly than the one in this story, and none of them ever shouted out "Make me come!" The majority simply encouraged me with increasingly erotic sighs and moans, especially as I stroked up their inner thighs, although many voiced their wishes more explicitly. I always considered each client's sincere desires to supersede the state massage board's unreasonably restrictive regulations, so no one left my table less than fully satisfied. Now that I'm retired I can massage everyone for free, so the board can't take away my license to practice. It's a good life.

You started writing in the third person and mid-story changed to second person. Second person rarely makes a good writing style. Otherwise, it is a good story. Please keep up the work.