All Comments on 'Afternoon Delight'

Starting the first sentence with terrible grammar is a red flag + read no further, so I didn’t.

4 Stars. Somewhat clinical and mechanical, lacks reader emotions.

Agree 100% with Prfsr.

To Prfsrand his anon friend: You missed a short story of mutual lust. True, the author used "her" instead of "she" in the first sentence. Also used the word "mine" to mean "my place". Those mistakes can be overlooked. The remainder of the story had fewer errors and was easily understood. It was a pleasant story to read. Don't let two mean spirited comments stop you from writing more stories. Thank you for posting this good one.